Lady Sydney

That was... amazing. :shock: But, then again, I would expect no less from you. And I can honestly say that your stories are probably the first stories on here that ...

Hey there, Time (If I may call you that)! :D I enjoyed this little piece of yours, but you understand that even great work can be improved. :wink: So, here ...

Hey there, Rubric. ^^ This is quite a read, I must say. It's impressive, but as said before, it's just a little bit too wordy. The reader won't mind the ...

Invader Zim by:Maki-chan storyboard:Madhatter The main character is Liz. Chapter 1 Strange Neighbors I looked out of my window. This night there were a lot of unusual noise s , ...

I have a few minutes, so I thought I may as well go ahead and crit this. Well, carelessaussie13 has already told you the number one thing you need to ...

Wonderful chapter, as always. Every chapter I read about Quinn, I seem to like her more and more. XD She's such a fun character. This was incredibly sweet and well ...

I said I'd get to this later, so here I am again. :P You were still lying on the floor, being your lazy self. You liked to lie in peace ...

This is good. You need more detail, but it's good, and I found few errors here and there: "What are you reading ? " He asked shyly . "Charlotte's Web ...

Oooo nice. ^^ I liked it. I'm not into Star Wars, and I've never watched it in my life, but I don't need to see it in order to crit ...

Mmm... this was good. I wasn't really wowed, though, but that could be because I couldn't visualize anything. Like JFW1415 said, your chapter is mainly just dialogue. Add narration/description/detail.

No this didn't bore me, and yes you should continue it. It looks promising! :D I enjoyed it all the way through, and I don't think I found any errors ...

This chapter was fantastic. ^^ I'm not sure if you've written anymore to it, but I'll check once I submit this. It's really enjoyable and something the reader can really ...

Quite a moving piece you have here. It was great! ^^ Everything was described well, so I could visualize everything. You have only one or two errors in here: 1. ...

Ok, since everyone's already pointed out your errors, I don't think I need to repeat them and tell you what you already know. So... I will move on and tell ...

Yeepee. :shock: A bit crammy, yes? First things first, it would be best if you post your chapters one at a time instead of all at once like this. Secondly, ...